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The
Environmental Protection Agency is using plain-language software tools
to encourage staff to write in a clear style. One thousand employees are
taking part in a pilot to train using Electronic Writing
Course and an online editor, called StyleWriter to help put plain language
into practice in every document.
EPA,
like most Federal Government agencies, has worked hard to improve its
written communications. Most notably, EPA has published scores of new
and revised regulations in the plain-language style, breaking out of traditional
models by organizing material for the reader in question-and-answer format.
The Agency uses personal pronouns, such as 'you' to address the reader,
focuses on the active voice and pares down long sentences and paragraphs.
But no matter how much effort the Agency puts in to plain language training,
a major problem remainshow do you train 15,000 people and then make
sure they put the training into practice. Software may be the key to guaranteeing
the success of any plain-language initiative.
When
the Plain Language Action Network organized a demonstration of plain English
software [StyleWriter], EPA decided to become the
lead agency to test the software alternative to traditional training methods.
EPA commissioned an Electronic Writing Course and bought a 1,000-user
licence to the StyleWriter editing package.
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Learning
to write the plain-language style means breaking the habits so often found
in writing to bring out people's natural communication skills. There are
many ideas to learnalthough most are common sense. People need to
practise on relevant examples and learn from expert tuition. Usually,
this means one-day or two-day training courses for a dozen people. This
traditional training is time-consuming, expensive and cannot reach everyone.
One estimate is that fewer than one public official in every 100 has had
training in clear writing.
The
Electronic Writing Course that EPA has commissioned uses 200 writing documents
from government agencies. Crucial in designing the Course was the work
of Annetta Cheek and Laurie Ford at the Plain Language Action Network.
This cooperation meant the designers could cover everything staff need
in plain language training. For example, there's an important section
on How to Write Clear Regulations, giving essential information
for anyone drafting rules.
Tony
Britten has been coordinating the plain-language software project at EPA.
After four years working with plain language, I was surprised by
the many new ideas and techniques the Electronic Writing Course taught
me. It's like sitting down one on one with a professional writer and getting
instant feedback. That packs a lot of learning power into a short time.
And the Writing Course is always right there at your desktop.
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Next, in order for staff to put into practice and refine and enhance the lessons they learned using the Electronic Writing Course, and to make those lessons an ongoing habit, EPA has also invested in the StyleWriter editing program. This sits in the toolbar of the word-processing program ready to help anyone edit the document into plain English. It highlights everything that detracts from clear writing. The program measures and highlights passive verbs, hidden verbs, complex words, wordy phrases, long sentences and many more style faults. It also highlights common slips of English, such as confused and misused words or hyphenation and word division errors.
One key way EPA uses StyleWriter is to set writing standards. For example, StyleWriter gives every document a clear style score. The best plain-language writing scores under 20. Publications such as Time, Newsweek, the Washington Post and Scientific American consistently score under 20. By contrast, a random sample of over 200 government documents showed the average style score was 90, with some scoring as high as 160 — eight times the recommended level. Only one in fifty government documents was in plain language.
Yet
any document can be in plain language without taking away content.
Here's an example.
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Typical
Government Style
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Plain-Language
Redraft |
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The Agency established
dedicated commuter lanes (DCLs) to facilitate the processing of
pre-approved, frequent boarder travelers. The DCLs are lanes dedicated
to travelers who have passed rigorous background checks that qualify
them for expedited entry and minimal inspection. This and other
boarder processing initiatives will result in the majority of travelers
being cleared through the process in 30 minutes or less except on
weekends and at peak traffic times. At the same time, we will safeguard
against the introduction of harmful pests and diseases of animals
and plants.
(88 words)
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The Agency set
up dedicated commuter lanes to help process pre-approved, frequent
boarder travelers who have passed vigorous background checks to
qualify for quick entry and minimum inspection. With other initiatives,
most of these travelers will clear in 30 minutes or less, except
on weekends and peak traffic times. There are safeguards against
introducing harmful pests and animal and plant diseases.
(61 words
30 percent shorter)
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StyleWriter's
Style Index 102 (Bad) |
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StyleWriter's
Style Index 16 (Excellent) |
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Every
agency has a problem in improving writing standards and adopting plain
language. StyleWriter can immediately show if writers are using plain
language, where the specific faults lie and how they can break any bad
writing habits they have. People who use StyleWriter on their documents
soon learn the skills needed to write well.
Tony
Britten has high hopes for these computer programs to change the culture
and help staff write to the highest standards. The demand from staff
to get on our pilot has been strong. The software will help anyone who
wants to write well. It means we have now given staff the tools to write
in plain language rather than just wishfully encouraging them to do so.
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